Daddy's Vengeful Little Girl
25% Based on a True Story
Here’s a fun fact. This story is 25% based on a true story. A few years ago, after a long day at the 9-5, I took my oldest to the playground. A few minutes in and I was hit with those stupid paper snappers. We are barely 5 minutes in and I decided not to make a scene (what’s the point? There is only 4 of us at the playground.) and take my son home.
At the time, I’m a 33 year old with a 3 year old son. After a long day of working remote and yelling at my son to be quiet while I presented in meetings, I needed to erase my dad guilt by taking him out. Instead, I was served with paper snappers and a crying kid. When we left, I remember my son saying, he “wanted to get them.” In that moment, I had to shut down his mindset and teach him a valuable lesson. Just because someone ruined your day or hurt you, it doesn’t mean you hit back! However, what I didn’t tell him was a moment like this can inspire a horror story.
Written by Phil Butehorn
**Note to the artist: we never see the adults' faces. We see them from their legs down or just their backs. Kind of like what they do with the adults from The Peanuts and Lincoln Loud’s parents from Loud House S1.**
Page 1 - 7 Panels
Page 1: View from behind our characters. It's the middle of the day. Daddy and Julie are walking to a playground that’s in the background.
Julie (caption): My daddy is better than yours.
Panel 2: Close-up of the playground. Lying under the playground’s bridge are two teenage girls. They are laughing together and up to no good.
Julie (caption): He takes me to get ice cream, makes me laugh, and plays with me at the playground.
Teenage Girls: HAHAHA!
Panel 3: The two girls lying on their backs under the bridge. One of them is in mid-throw of a paper snapper
Teenage 1: Oops!
Teenage girls: HAHAHA!!
Panel 4: It explodes at the dad’s feet. The girls are laughing off-panel.
SFX: POP
Girls (off-panel): HAHAHA
Panel 5: More paper snappers were thrown around Julie’s dad. He’s jumping in the air after what happened in the prior panel. The teenagers are still under the playground bridge laughing.
SFX: POP POP POP POP
Teenage girls: HAHAHA!
Julie: Daddy! Are you ok?
Panel 6: Dad and daughter are now walking off the playground. The daughter is upset. She’s kicking the air and her head is down.
Dad: Julie, we’re leaving now!
Julie: But Daddy, we just got here!
Panel 7: The daughter does a double-take of the girls laughing under the bridge and she looks pissed.
Julie: Daddy, why are people mean?
Dad (off-panel): Sometimes people suck and all they want to do is deflate our fun days.
Panel 2 - 5 Panels
Panel 1: It's now nighttime and we are in Julie’s room. The bedroom lights are still on. View from dad while sitting on Julie’s bed and she is tucked in bed.
Dad: Good night, sweetie.
Julie: I’m so sorry about those mean girls.
Dad: You don't need to worry about me. My job is to worry about you.
Panel 2: View from Julie’s bed headboard. The room’s light is off and her dad is exiting the door into the hallway.
Dad: I love you!
Panel 3: Bird’s eye view of Julie in bed and she is pretending to sleep.
NO COPY
Panel 4: Same description as Panel 3, but now Julie’s eyes are wide open.
NO COPY
Panel 5: Julie is sneaking out of her room and crawling through the window.
NO COPY
Page 3 - 6 Panels
Panel 1: It's now dusk. The sun is minutes away from setting and the sky is purple. Julie hides behind a tree as teenage girls are entering the house next door.
Teenage Girl 1: My rule is don't be a weirdo and I won't treat you like one.
Teenage Girl 2: HAHA. You're such a bitch!
Panel 2: View from the front door looking down. Julie is knocking on the door.
SFX: Knock Knock
Panel 3: View from the next-door neighbor’s dad answering the door. Julie is looking up and acting innocent with a big smile and wave.
Julie: Hi Mr. Haley! Cassandra invited me to come over for movie night.
Panel 4: We are now inside the house. Julie is standing in teenage girl’s doorway and is holding a knife behind her back. In front of her are the teenage girls and they look very confused.
Teenager 1: What the hell are you doin----
Julie: You ruined my park date with my daddy. I'm here to make you apologize.
Panel 5: The door is slammed closed.
SFX: WHAM
Panel 6: The door is still closed, but you can hear the girls screaming behind the door.
Teenager 1: Get off me you fre--
SFX: Snikt
Teenager 2: AAHHH
Julie: SHUT THE #$&% UP OR I WILL KILL YOU!
SFX: Snikt Snikt
Page 4 - 5 Panels
Panel 1- close up: Julie exits the bedroom with blood on her PJs. The girls are lying on the floor in the background.
NO COPY
Panel 2: View from the top of the staircase. We see bloody footprints on top leading to Julie walking down the staircase.
NO COPY
Panel 3: Julie lives in ranch styled house. She is climbing back into the house and there is blood all over the bottom of the window.
NO COPY
Panel 4: Bird’s eye view of Julie tucked in the bed again. She is still awake and calling for her dad.
SFX (coming from outside): WEEE-OO
Julie: DADDY!
Panel 5: View from behind the Dad. He is peeking in to see what she wants and Julie reminds him that she loves him.
Daddy: Missy, you should be sleeping.
Julie: I forgot to tell you something.
Daddy: What's that?
Julie: I love you, too!!!!